I am from
two homes
One on
the east
One on
the west
My mother
My father
They thought it was best
For me to stay on a quest
So I would not lose focus
So I would not feel hopeless
They did not want me to feel like it is my fault
So I would not lock my feelings in a vault
But where I am from
It is always on me
Everyone would leave
I was never at peace
Never able to release my demon
That created a beacon in my broken heart
I
was smart to be apart From those who depart from my life
I am from a home that has taught me to
keep away from people who never stay
I am from a place where people come and
go
I see people there but they are really
not
They sit like robots
And I just hope they can see me
With their gleaming eyes
And with their wise words
I am from a place where the grass
Just
might be greener on the other side
Deep...
ReplyDeleteI like how you compared some people to robots.
ReplyDeleteI like the deep meaning you used.
ReplyDeleteNatalia,
ReplyDeleteI like that you incorporate your support from your parents in the very beginning. Nice job!
I especially like when you said "I am from a place where people come and go". That is so true.
ReplyDeleteI really liked your last two sentences they ended your poem nicely.
ReplyDeleteI love your poem, Nati. Even though I've read it twice already. My favorite line was "I am from a place where the grass just might be greener on the other side. " nice background. I love you sis.
ReplyDeleteI thought that the way you wrote it was vulnerable and it sounds like where you came from made you who you are today. It was really good.
ReplyDeleteGlad too see it's not just another free verse, nice structure!
ReplyDeleteI really liked how you Put a lot of emotion into that poem
ReplyDeleteI think it was very creative how you decided to go on a different route with the poem about your parents divorce. Good job :)
ReplyDeleteWow amazing word choice and how you relate yourself to the grass
ReplyDeleteVery deep, excellent word choice and flow
ReplyDeleteLove the way you incorporated your thoughts and feelings into your poem . -Marissa
ReplyDeleteI can relate to the topic of your poem and I like how you can feel your emotions through your word choice.
ReplyDeleteVery very deep... Line 19-21
ReplyDeleteI liked your poem and the beginning flowed really well. I liked your word choice.
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