Friday, October 24, 2014

I am from

I am from two homes
One on the east
One on the west
My mother
My father
They thought it was best
For me to stay on a quest
So I would not lose focus
So I would not feel hopeless
They did not want me to feel like it is my fault
So I would not lock my feelings in a vault
But where I am from
It is always on me
Everyone would leave
I was never at peace
Never able to release my demon
That created a beacon in my broken heart
I was smart to be apart From those who depart from my life
I am from a home that has taught me to keep away from people who never stay
I am from a place where people come and go
I see people there but they are really not
They sit like robots
And I just hope they can see me
With their gleaming eyes
And with their wise words

I am from a place where the grass 
Just might be greener on the other side

17 comments:

  1. I like how you compared some people to robots.

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  2. I like the deep meaning you used.

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  3. Natalia,
    I like that you incorporate your support from your parents in the very beginning. Nice job!

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  4. I especially like when you said "I am from a place where people come and go". That is so true.

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  5. I really liked your last two sentences they ended your poem nicely.

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  6. I love your poem, Nati. Even though I've read it twice already. My favorite line was "I am from a place where the grass just might be greener on the other side. " nice background. I love you sis.

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  7. I thought that the way you wrote it was vulnerable and it sounds like where you came from made you who you are today. It was really good.

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  8. Glad too see it's not just another free verse, nice structure!

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  9. I really liked how you Put a lot of emotion into that poem

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  10. I think it was very creative how you decided to go on a different route with the poem about your parents divorce. Good job :)

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  11. Wow amazing word choice and how you relate yourself to the grass

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  12. Very deep, excellent word choice and flow

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  13. Love the way you incorporated your thoughts and feelings into your poem . -Marissa

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  14. I can relate to the topic of your poem and I like how you can feel your emotions through your word choice.

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  15. I liked your poem and the beginning flowed really well. I liked your word choice.

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